Post by The Master Tactician on Jan 8, 2013 9:26:38 GMT -5
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Post by The Swift Scout on Jan 8, 2013 19:20:14 GMT -5
I guess I'll go first. Just wondering... but am I making Teemo's hidden side a little... too soft? I wanted to create a little contrast, but I wasn't sure if how I was doing that was upsetting people.
And also I was wondering if my story about Teemo's secret was alright, as in is it too far fetched?
Post by The Mad Chemist on Jan 8, 2013 22:33:37 GMT -5
Well is good and it does make contrast. I would like if you take the trip to Icathia as a opportunity to show is the more "professional" side of Teemo.
Post by heimerdinger on Jan 9, 2013 7:58:06 GMT -5
Personally, would like to see glimpses of Teemo's old lore every now and again (you know, the thing about being "Bandle City's silent psychotic assassin") but that's just me. Your teemo interpretantion is fantastic, even if it doesn't fully cater to my tastes
I would also appreciate some feedback as well. Anything you think I can do to improve is welcome, but I'd like to focus on my word choice. Am I being scientific enough? Or perhaps too much, to the point of not being understandable sometimes? (I expect Heimer to get into deep science lingo too often, making non-scientist characters go "waitwhat" after listening to him; but maybe my interpretation is wrong).
Post by Victus Brightblade on Jan 9, 2013 8:18:31 GMT -5
Anyone talking to Hiemer should need to ask him to get less technical.
He kinda sounds like he has Asberger's syndrome.
Wiki: Asperger syndrome (AS), also known as Asperger's syndrome or Asperger disorder, is an autism spectrum disorder (ASD) that is characterized by significant difficulties in social interaction, alongside restricted and repetitive patterns of behavior and interests. It differs from other autism spectrum disorders by its relative preservation of linguistic and cognitive development. Although not required for diagnosis, physical clumsiness and atypical (peculiar, odd) use of language are frequently reported.
tldr: Not great social skills and he tends to focus on one topic (hextech in this case) and fuck the rest. This is not saying Hiemer is handicapped, but it fits.
Just I see. Not saying for you to do anything. I am a reserve of pointless info and I dredged that bit up for your benefit or for you to put in an attic to gather dust.
EDIT: Alrighty, I wasn't as clear as I could be. This syndrome is just a fancy name for a set of quirks. I am not meaning to call anyone with this syndrome retarded or handicapped, for insults like that go to the solo queue and myself, so I apologize for the misunderstanding.
Post by heimerdinger on Jan 9, 2013 16:13:54 GMT -5
I've looked at some of your RP (Hall of War, your entry in the preparation thread); and the only thing I have to say is that you could be a smidget more detailed in your descriptions.
Your stoic, but fierce portrayal of Pantheon is great, so keep it up!
Post by The Swift Scout on Jan 9, 2013 19:00:08 GMT -5
Wanted to say thanks for those that responded.
And don't worry, you'll see plenty of the silent killer during the Icathia run. I mean, he IS supposed to be quite jubilant when he's home (aside from those personal moments), but I haven't gotten to any serious combat with him. :3
Post by The Shadow of War on Jan 14, 2013 1:54:00 GMT -5
So i've hit a brick wall concerning my portrayal of Hecarim...
Through his lore and his in-game quotes + being from the Shadow Isles, is it safe to say he's immortal? Or more like the Forsaken from the Warcraft series?
Oh, and while i'm here judge my posts with the Centaur thus far and stuffs if you will~
Post by heimerdinger on Jan 14, 2013 8:28:01 GMT -5
I have seen your posts and I think you portray Hecarim very well. You could always go for a more "Ancient being" thematic. Like, "I AM THE RIDER OF DESTRUCTION, I HAVE REAPED A THOUSAND SOULS YADA YADA".
Forsaken? Probably not. Arthas / Banshees? More like it.
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